Better. But when you are presenting evidence, there is an order: strongest first, weakest in the middle, second-strongest last. Your flow of presentation is abominable.
[Then, transitioning easily, like the fact of him giving pointers isn't utterly absurd:]
And of course it made me uncomfortable. You were uncomfortable to learn of it as well. As was Ms. Harmon. Are you going to admit that you two are likewise controlling, or are you going to huff and puff and exert yourself to apply that insult to me alone?
oh my god never apologize please, you are SO GOOD AT LIGHT ugh
Better. But when you are presenting evidence, there is an order: strongest first, weakest in the middle, second-strongest last. Your flow of presentation is abominable.
[Then, transitioning easily, like the fact of him giving pointers isn't utterly absurd:]
And of course it made me uncomfortable. You were uncomfortable to learn of it as well. As was Ms. Harmon. Are you going to admit that you two are likewise controlling, or are you going to huff and puff and exert yourself to apply that insult to me alone?